Thursday, September 23, 2010

Story 2

Money Shortage Causes Stir

"We never had problems until we began letting migrants come to this country to work. We need to protect local residents from them," Commissioner Anita Shenuski stated.

Sherburne County commissioner and the sheriff’s department are at odds because of the shortage in money for Sherburne County this year. Shenuski argued with Commission President Anne Chenn about migrant workers. She said, "They are a problem for our law enforcement, our schools, and our healthcare system." Migrant workers will work for a lower salary, they take jobs from the locals, and any of the migrants not working are more likely to raise crime in town.

Sheriff Gus DiCesari said his department needs to replace eight police cruisers and hire five new deputies, yet the county cut police budget. $580 thousand dollars would be needed to meet these demands. He stated that migrant workers are to blame for the needed increase in police and the diminishing of county funds.
Chenn argued that the migrants helped the community because they worked the jobs local residents didn’t want. These people were a benefit to the community, not a nuisance. The county commissioners said they had to use this years budget, $127 million dollars, for increased cost in healthcare for employees, and higher fuel costs. Plus, a new $30 million dollar prison had to be built to alleviate overcrowding. The budget was not to be used as a convenience for the police, but to better the community.

Chann told DeCesari the sheriff’s department would have to make do this year because Sherburne county didn’t have the additional money needed. Commissioners voted 5-2 against the additional $580 thousand for the sheriffs department.

9 comments:

  1. Awesome story! I loved it! the lead was catchy, but im not sure of how well it connected to the second paragraph..
    other than that, i liked how it was straight to the point! nice work!

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  2. I like that you used a quote in the lead! I'm not sure the word nuisance was used in the story, but it could have been and i missed it. What style did you use to write your story? Nice work overall! Very easy to read and follow along.

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  3. The lead was very eye catching, but didn't lead into the next paragraph very well. I liked how you were able to include all of the important facts and still make it pretty streamlined.

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  4. I don't feel as if you captured the heat of the debate. There were parts that seemed more like personal opinion than fact.

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  5. I think you got part of your quote wrong, but I liked that you did something different and had a quote as the lead. I thought it was easy to read and you got the important facts in good. The body of the story flowed well.

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  6. I liked the lead. The body paragraphs were good but didn't seem to catch the essence of how truly heated the arguments were. Good use of facts, stats, and quotes! Nice work!

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  7. Great Job! I too like that you used a quote for the beginning and you were able to get all of the important information in there. I would have like to see just a little bit more included about the argument as as well. I did notice that in one place you spelled DiCesari one way and differently in another...but overall I think you did pretty well.

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  8. Thanks! I too think that the second paragraph didn't flow right with the lead.. I couldn't figure out how to get it all to go together correctly and I was getting irritated with trying to re-word it. Thanks for the little comments about spelling and quotes, I will makes sure to check that next time :)

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  9. Hey this is really good! I thought you did a nice job presenting both sides of the story. Personally, when I read it, I didn't notice a lack of intensity in the argument at all. However, I must agree with some of the others that the lead seemed somewhat out of place. I still think it was a really good article though :)
    -Craig-

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